Wednesday, September 3, 2014

Storytelling Week 3: A Boy and his Older Brother

This is a story about a young boy, Tom, and his older brother, John. Two days before school started Tom went to his brother and told him he was scared about school starting. John told little Tom not to worry about high school. Tom informed John that he was more scared of being picked on than going to school itself. John was saddened by this but told his little brother that we would make sure no one picked on him. He also told him to avoid a guy named Mike.

School started and John was enjoying his senior year. He was a star athlete and everyone looked up to him. He would walk down the halls and everyone would high five him and tell him hello. Tom, on the other hand, was into math and science. He was considered a nerd and walked through the halls virtually unseen. His first few days went by okay. He enjoyed the classes he was in except for gym but he thought maybe this year would be alright anyways. Then the second week started. Tom met a new guy named Mike. He is a junior but wanted to be friends with Tom. He told Tom that he would drive him to lunch and to the mall whenever he needed. At first Tom thought that was a great idea. They hung out a couple of times but then Mike told Tom he would beat him if he did not help him with his math homework. That is when Tom realized that this was the Mike his older brother had warned him about.

Tom’s nightmare had come true. He was about to be bullied by Mike. Tom thought about just doing the work for Mike and just try to make it through the year. He did Mikes first homework assignment but that was not enough. Mike wanted him to do all of his homework for him. That is when Tom knew he had made a mistake. So Tom went to his brother John and told him about Mike. John came up with a plan for school the next day.

Mike met Tom in the hall at school and asked him where his homework was. Tom told him he was done doing his homework for him. This infuriated Mike. Mike went to grab Tom but Tom took off running. Mike chased him. Tom turned a corner and Mike followed. Before Mike could even try to turn and run away John had a hold of him. John picked Mike up and walked him outside. He told Mike that if he ever talked to his brother again then he would do more than just pick him up and take him outside. John also added that if he ever heard of Mike bullying anyone he would not like the consequences. Mike knew he had made a mistake and never bullied again.

Author’s Note: This story was based off of a story from Aesop (Winter). The story is The Dog, the Cock, and the Fox. That story was about a fox that tried to trick a fox into coming out of a tree so he could eat him. Instead the Cock tricks the fox into entering the tree where the dog grabs him. I changed this to two brothers and a bully. The bully tricks the younger brother into thinking he was his friend but in the end the little brother tricks the bully into being caught by his brother. I thought this was a nice way to tell the story and still keep mostly the same moral to the story. The picture is from the story.
 
The Dog, the Cock, and the Fox
Web Source: Un-Textbook
Bibliography: Book: The Dog, the Cock, and the Fox 
Author:  Pictures by Milo Winter
Web Source: Aesop (Winter)

4 comments:

  1. I really enjoyed reading your story. I liked how you changed it into people and used the brother and the bully as characters. The Aesop's fables are great because they're short and can be translated in any way, allowing storytellers to get creative. Your story was very entertaining to read and I enjoyed hearing about something that everyone at some point is scared of: starting high school. Maybe not always for the right reasons, but it can be nerve wracking to be in a new situation. Thanks for sharing!

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  2. I have not checked out the Aesop's fables yet but this one was great so I may have to do that some time! I liked that you changed the animals into people. The characters being brothers and a bully is really relatable to readers. It was easier to follow and it helped me to put myself in the characters shoes. Great job!

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  3. I really enjoyed your story! I liked how you wrote it in modern language. I also thought it was very clever to change the animals into people. It was a good story, and I think you changed it well. I am glad you kept the story the same, but changed everything else about it. It was a really clever way of making a story totally different and unpredictable. Good job!

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  4. Hi Hi!

    I liked how you used the bond of brothers to tell this story. Changing the story from animals to humans makes this story more relate-able and able to use the lesson in real life. Humans relate to humans! Bullies deserve to be tricked back, get a taste of their own medicine, ya know? I like the moral of your story and the original. Keep up the good work!

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